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Interesting story! Sounds promising if you make the whole plug this well. Except for the bold thing
And Cosmic, don't try to exclude science from fiction in science-fiction...
This post has been edited by Mumbling Psycho : 16 September 2007 - 04:33 PM
Actually, that was Josh. For all I care, it could have been an artificial construct designed to emulate the sun that had a malfunction and went nova, or at least caused the sun to explode.
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It sounds like you were trying to be poetic, a sort of free-verse prose poem. I don't know if that's your intention, but I had the misfortune of reading lots of poetry last semester, and that's what it reminds me of. And to be blunt, it needs a bit of work still.
Yeah, I was going for a somewhat poetic feel. I might make a few minor alterations, but I am not a poet by any means so I have no clue how to make it sound better that way.
I think it's also worth pointing out that the Sun isn't capable of going supernova.
Yes, that's true. It needs to reach a certain mass first, if I'm not mistaken. All you need to make it go nova anyway, however, is a very large interstellar dust cloud to choke the sun's emissions up. It's possible that I should have mentioned that in the above, but I forgot that that was what happened temporarily. :rolleyes:
Thanks! Yes, the whole story should be at least this well written, possibly better. Of course some things may be written more poorly, but that remains to be seen.
For all I care, it could have been an artificial construct designed to emulate the sun that had a malfunction and went nova, or at least caused the sun to explode.
Hey! How'd you find out about that?!? I mean- !GAH!
@shlimazel, on Sep 15 2007, 11:45 AM, said in I'm well into developing a TC....:
Psychic.
At least T3, I'd say.
Naw, I'm a T2.
Okay, time for today's update. I worked on a new mission, for most of today's labour, but I couldn't get it to work right today. I'll get back to work on that tomorrow.
I'm a T0.
Okay, time for today's update. I finished the mission, and started working on redoing a few ships. I think I'll work on adding more spontaneous things that just happen tomorrow.
@joshtigerheart, on Sep 14 2007, 08:48 PM, said in I'm well into developing a TC....:
Yeah, it's going for the epic, sad, slow prose a-la Homeworld, but doesn't pull it off.
That could be written in a much better way, Shlimazel. Not to be insulting, just letting you know that i cringed a little.
@zapp, on Sep 15 2007, 09:04 PM, said in I'm well into developing a TC....:
I'm a T(-infinity). What's the deal with everybody hating the story after I love it?
This post has been edited by Cosmic_Nusiance : 16 September 2007 - 09:47 PM
Because you keep spamming and are a nusiance.
Mmm. Well, if anyone thinks that they can do better, they are welcome to write something and show it off. I like what I wrote, but if someone can show me a better way to write this then I'll use that instead.
Throw me the material and facts needed and I'll see if I can put something together. It might give me much needed motivation to work on my other writing projects.
Really? Thanks. I'll try and put together a story summary for you and PM it to you. If you need more than that be sure to tell me so.
This post has been edited by Shlimazel : 17 September 2007 - 12:09 PM
Okay, time for today's update!
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Ugh. I got next to nothing done today. Where did the time GO!?!? Hopefully I'll do better tomorrow.
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Well, I guess I did get a couple of descriptions done, so that isn't so bad.
This post has been edited by Shlimazel : 17 September 2007 - 02:58 PM
I'd like to draw this fact to everyone's attention: Today marks the first month spend working on Spacelane!
Woohoo! And many more to follow!
Okay, I finished the fourth mission in the Merchant Marine storyline and ground out a 4000+ character desc for a significant moment in the story. I also added a new ship, which looks good in game but is a tad smaller than it should be.
Here's my new loading picture. It's considerably niftier looking than the old one.
Okay, time for today's update! I did a lot of rewiring today, and a LOT of retouching. I also finished detailing my new ship, redid my loading pict, and edited a lot of descs and ship files. It is coming along really well. I won't set a deadline for the teaser, but expect it at least by the end of the month.