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This week's Chronicles comes to us from spitfire.
You can get this Chronicle (url="http://"http://www.AmbrosiaSW.com/cgi-bin/ubb/forumdisplay.cgi?action=topics&number;=49&SUBMIT;=Go")here(/url).
As for my comments -- I enjoyed it, but it's not smooth...try to make the words flow, as well as the timeline. I like the contents, but make everything more descriptive and more flowing.
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Originally posted by theGlueBubble: **As for my comments -- I enjoyed it, but it's not smooth...try to make the words flow, as well as the timeline. I like the contents, but make everything more descriptive and more flowing.
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I agree completely, it's a bit rough but the story is very interresting. It just needed some proof reading and drafting that's all. I found it to be a very beckoning plot. It makes you want to know more. It leaves you at the climax of the introduction, so you can't wait to know what's about to happen.
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Just out of curiosity.... how many stories are actually in the Chronicles queue at any given time?
Just interested...
-Andiyar
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::checks date when the last was submitted:: 9/7 ::checks date of his submission:: 9/9 WOOT!
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(quote)Originally posted by Tarnฤlion Andiyarus: **Just out of curiosity.... how many stories are actually in the Chronicles queue at any given time?
Just interested... ...so everyone, start writing!
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Originally posted by Celchu: **::checks date when the last was submitted:: 9/7 ::checks date of his submission:: 9/9 WOOT!
Indeed, yours is next in the queue.
(quote)Originally posted by theGlueBubble: **Right now there are 5 -- it's been staying about that level, but it is ever slowly increasing. I hope we rival the EV and EVO Chronicles one day.;)
Once my next one comes online (figure a couple of weeks) I'll upload some more of my story. If all goes well, I think for the one story I will have 9 or 10 submissions!
Oh, and how many submissions do the EV/EVO chronicles get? :::starts up word processor, muttering numerous vague sounding ideas:::
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Written by the gluebubble: Right now there are 5 -- it's been staying about that level, but it is ever slowly increasing. I hope we rival the EV and EVO Chronicles one day. ...so everyone, start writing!
I've got 2 comin soon.