Ares Chronicles: The End of the Order - Pt. 1 by Captain Carnotaur

The
End of the Order

We need to get the kid a grammar check...

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World War 1 was fought with Machine Guns and Cannons.
World War 2 was fought with bombs and missiles.
I don't know what World War 3 will be fought with, but it will be so terrible that
World War 4 will be fought with stone clubs.

Steven Hawkings,
-A Brief History of Time

I can't quite put my finger on the mistakes... I know they're there, but I don't know how to change them. Oh well. It's readable, at least.

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Sundered Angel ,
The One and Only

Ares Webboard Moderator, and all-around Nice Guy

I think I've figured out how the kid writes these stories:
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"Let's do this!"
-Styth
Titan A.E.

No I don't, and I take that as an insult. Besides, this is my first try at writing a short story. All my other ones were at the bare minimum 40+ pages long.

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To Escape Velocity: Nova and Beyond!
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Millennium. Its coming, prepare for it.
Coming to the (url="http://"http://www.ambrosiaSW.com/games/ev/chronicles.html")EV Chronicles(/url).