Nemesis

Komak Stories

This is the year 1189NC . 2 weeks have passed since Commander Ceena toke control of the new and good Federation. The new alliance with Heeran house was going pretty well. Things were rolling good this time. Komak was still the Federation Freelancer Inspector and the captain of the beautiful Red Carnage. They only had been helping defending the Federation borders from Auroran and Moash troops. In this moment, they were in Alphara system and 2 Moashi Cruisers just entered the system
“Sir, incoming IR missiles!” – yelled Arnaut.
“Jam them!” – ordered Komak. Red Carnage crew was now dressed with Federation soldier’s clothes and the Federal symbol had been painted on the big craft.
“Railguns, fire at will!” – said Komak, to the railguns officers. They start firing them, damaging heavily the enemy cruisers.
“They have no shields, Ganuk.” – somebody said.
“Sir, we been hit! Low damage, I repeat low damage, only some IR missiles!” – some one else yelled. On that moment, Federation destroyers entered the system. “Moash Cruiser, Red Carnage here, do you copy?” – Komak asked, using the communicator.
“Moash Cruiser, I repeat: DO YOU COPY?” – he yelled.
“Yes Speak fast, weakerling, ‘cause we have no time for you.” – a dark and heavy voice sounded.
“You are surrounded. Surrender right now or we will be forced to destroy you. If you enter hyperspace, we will open fire!” – our hero shouted trough the communicator. The Moash troops closed the communications and started entering hyperspace.
“FIRE FIRE FIRE! BLOW ‘EM UP!” – Komak ordered. Red Carnage and the Federation destroyers shot all their weapons at the cruisers. One of them was destroyer, the other, besides having heavy damage, escaped. “It’s over. Let’s go to the Spacedock.” – our hero said, very softly. Red Carnage landed and after a few repairments it headed to Rautheiron. “Why are we going to Rauther?” – Skinny asked.
“I’m thinking in adding a few hellhound launchers. What you think?” – Komak said, while smiling.
“It’s a cool idea, motherfoucker. Catch you later.” – Skinny replied, while leaving the bridge. The ship was traveling in hyperspace and in a few days they would reach Rauther. Komak was still sitting in his Ganuk’s chair. Finally, before exiting the bridge he asked Arnaut to stay in charge of things while he was out. He entered the living room. It was big and on a corner he saw a table. 3 men and 2 women were playing cards. One of the women was Larna so he approached the little group. “What up?” – he tried to look cool.
“Hey, captain.” – someone murmured. Komak grabbed a chair and sat near Larna.
“Throw that seven.” – one of the players said to another, while smiling.
“You trippin’, dog. You see m’cards!” – the other replied, a bit annoyed.
“Shut up and play for real, dudes.” – the other woman said. She had light dark skin and black hair.
“So, Larna ” – Komak finally found courage to speak.
“If you’re here, who’s commanding the bridge?” – one of the men said.
“Oh, err, I left Arnaut in charge.” – he replied. He turned to Larna again and restarted the conversation – “wan’na go to a nice restaurant on Rauther. I know a cool place when I been there, before joining the Rebellion.”
“Sure. It’ll be fun.” – she replied, smiling.
“Yeah, it’ll be.” – Komak said back. The other players were looking at them and when they saw that Komak was looking back at them one asked: “Wan’na join the game, cap?”

“Rautheiron, Red Carnage here, requesting landing permit.” – Arnaut asked trough the communicator.
“Granted. Dock 2 is clear, land there please.” – Rautheiron control station replied. After they landed. Skinny and a few crew staff went purchasing the hellhound launchers. Komak and Larna went to the Restaurant. They called a cab and finally one arrived. They entered the back seat. The cab computer asked where they wanted to go and after Komak telling the name of the restaurant, it start moving. “You look beautiful.” – he said to Larna, passing his hand on her face. She smiled and when she was about to kiss him, the cab stopped and they flew collapsing with the front seat.
“Seat belts on, please.” – the cab mechanical voice ordered. They stew a bit mad but they putted the belts and the cab started moving again. They reached the restaurant, Komak paid 20 credits and entered it. They sat on a table and a mechanic waiter approach. They made their orders, ate and finally paid the bill. It had been a nice dinner, they were both happy so they decided to walk to the Red Carnage. The streets were dark and when they entered an alleyway a shadow appeared in front of them. The man had a brown hat and a black vest so they couldn’t saw his face. The man had a blaster and before he shot, Komak threw himself to Larna, falling behind garbage cans. The shots failed, hitting the ground then he start shooting at the garbage cans. Our hero grabbed his electric pistol and when he turned to fire back, the man had gone.

Red Carnage left Rauther and headed to New Babylon. (Commander Ceena Orders) It seems that some one will contact them for a mission when they reach it. “So who was that man?” – Skinny asked. A small group was in the ship’s living room, talking.
“I have no idea. Maybe a pirate.” – Komak suggested.
“No, he had a strange behavior for a pirate. It looks he was counting with the surprise element ‘cause he didn’t want to start a battle.” – Larna said. Everybody agreed.
“Well, doesn’t matter now. You’re both safe.” – somebody said, gently. Suddenly, the living room communicator started bipping. Komak pressed the button and a voice said: “Bridge here. Ganuk, we have spotted a pirate group attacking a leviathan. Shall we go assist them?”
“Yes. I’m coming to the bridge right now. I want people on the storm chainguns. Let’s go, let’s go!” – Komak ordered and everybody started moving. He entered the bridge and sat on his chair. “Arnaut, scan those crafts. I wan’na know what weapons and outfits they have.” – he ordered. Arnaut started pressing buttons and after a few time he send the message to Komak’s screen.
“Ok then, it’s a Manticore, a Pirate Valk and a Pirate Argosy. The Manticore as quad light blaster and that would destroy our hellhounds before they reach it. It as an Ion Cannon too so don’t let it come closer. Concentrate all railgun fire on the Manticore.” – Komak ordered and the railguns started shooting – “ The Pirate Valk as an Ion Cannon too so shoot those hellhounds right now” – he ordered.
"What about the Argosy?" – Kotrach asked.
“Let it come closer. We will use the storms on it.” – our hero said back.
The Valkyrie, after a few hellhound hits, tries to enter hyperspace but the last shot disabled it. The Manticore shot EMP torpedos but Red Carnage quad light blasters destroyed them before reaching its target. After that, the railguns made the big pirate craft meet heaven. The Argosy was destroyed in a second.
“Thank’s, sir!” – said the Leviathan captain, before entering hyperspace.
“DON’T SHOOT! WE SURRENDER!” – yelled the Valk crew. The big Auroran Carrier boarded the disabled ship, retrieved the prisoners and continued their trip to New Babylon. On the living room, the Valkyrie crew was in the middle big table. A lot of Komak men were there, armed with blasters, guarding them. The security there had everything controlled. “Captain, we found nothing on the Valk. The prisoners are only normal dumb pirates.” – said Kotrach.
“Ok, I’m gon’na meet ’em on the living room to have a word with them.” – Komak replied. He entered the living room. The prisoners were a bit mad but they didn’t made nothing. “Who’s the captain?” – Komak shouted.
“Died on the explosion ” – somebody murmured.
“Who’s the sub-captain?” – he shouted again.
“It’s me.” – a blond man said. He was dressed with some jeans and a black coat. It looked he didn’t shaved in years.
“Name and ship name?” – Komak asked, with no expression on his face.
“Motara, Murder Hole.” – the man said. He wasn’t enjoying that.
“You have been arrested by the Red Carnage. I’m captain Komak, the federation inspector and your gon’na see crossed stars for a few years.” – he said and left the room, smiling.

The giant Auroran craft landed on New Babylon. A Federal patrol toke the pirate prisoners. “I’m going to meet Commander Ceena on his office. Stay here, order some food, ‘k? – Komak asked Skinny.
“Sure, motherfoucker.” – the black gansta dude replied. Komak was dressed with is Inspector clothes: a dark blue coat, dark blue pants and black boots. He exited the shipyards and walked trough the streets. He finally reached Ceena’s office. He entered the building and asked a guard where was the office. After having his information he headed to the place and entered it. Ceena was eating a sandwich and he got a bit embarrassed with Komak’s entrance. The room was small. It had a window that shows the road and a table near the wall. The new Fed Commander put the sandwich away and started pressing buttons on the computer. Our hero didn’t said a word and sat. “Chrumps I’m sorry.” – said Ceena, with some food on his mouth –“ Listen to me, this is very important. Really, really IMPORTANT! You probably heard of Ory’hara. The chosen man to unite all nations.” Komak nodded and a bit nervous he asked: “What about him?”
“The Polaris found him. Where it doesn’t matter but now he wishes to unite the Federation, the Polaris and the Aurorans. He thinks if we unite with the Polaris first, the Aurorans won’t have a chance but to ally too. It will be the beginning of a new era.” – Commander Ceena was a tall and muscled man. He had very short light brown hair. He turned the computer screen at Komak –“ Ory’hara is coming to sol next month. He will discuss with us a peace purpose and more stuff. This is the Federation/Polaris map. –“said the commander, pointing at the map”- The systems in yellow are the systems he will cross. Your job is to cross all these systems. Destroy any Pirates, Auroran Marauders and all that. Then land on this space station here, Ory’hara will meet you in one day or two, and then escort him back to sol.”
“Ok, I’ll do it. Give me the Cd with the map so I can install in my ship, Commander.” – said Komak. Ceena retrieved a Cd and handed it to our hero.
“I have also sent a person to pick up the Heraan representative. Ory’hara is very pleased with the alliance we made. That’s one of the reasons he’s coming.” – Commander Ceena smiled.
“Who who did you sent, Commander?” – asked Komak, trying to not look very curious.
“Zanu. He’s a very brave man. That boy joined the Renegades when we were still fighting for freedom. Here is his file” – Ceena said, then he start pressing buttons again and then Zanu’s file appeared on the screen. Komak started reading it.

Federal Control

ID: 3D40NM31009

Name: Zanu Bathuc Del’krypt

Gender: Caucasian Male

Birth Date: 4 April, 1165NC

Current Age: 24

Ship: Polaris Striker

Ship Name: Static

“Why does he have a Striker?” – Komak interrupted.
“Well, he’s kind of a mercenary. –“ Commander Ceena replied” – 3 years ago, he was a Duelist. He earned his life fighting other Aurorans for money. His ship was an Abomination. One day, a big battle was going to happen. He and another brave Vella family warrior. The Auroran council betted 60 millions on him. But his adversary promised him 55 millions plus 55% of his earnings. Zanu loved money so he lost on purpose. When the Auroran council found he cheated they toke him to jail. 4 days later he escaped in a shuttle to a Polaris station. There, he stole a Striker and came to Federation systems. He joined the Renegades. When he did that, he hidden his ship and started flying a Renegade Lightning. Now that we have beaten the Bureau dictator, Krane, and her oppression, Zanu picked his ship and I paid him to help us defending the borders, now I asked him to go pick the Heraan representative, in change of a few credits. He’s a good pilot and I trust him. I couldn’t ask you to do it because you’re going to pick Ory’hara.”
Komak nodded and continue reading his file.

Legal Status on:

Federation: Citizen
Auroran: No Convictions
Family Moash: No Convictions
Family Heraan: No Record
Family Dani: No Convictions
Family Vella: No Convictions
Family Tekel: No Convictions
Polaris: Minor Offender

“Ok, I’ve seen enough. Good bye, Commander.” – said Komak, while leaving the room.
“Bye.” – Ceena replied.

Komak was walking trough the streets, thinking in Ory’hara. Then he though in Commander Ceena, the Auroran Emperor and the Polaris President, holding their hands and dancing. He laughed to himself. Suddenly, he entered an alleyway. In front of him, the same man he saw on Rauther appeared. He had his vest and his hat and his face was unseen, again. He had a blaster in his hand and fired at Komak, hitting his leg. Our hero screamed and hidden behind a wall. The mysterious man threw a grenade and disappeared in the dark. Komak was hurt but he tried to run. He fall on the ground. The grenade exploded and he flew right into a wall

What do you think of the story? It’s going well, right? You will find a lot of surprises in the future

This post has been edited by Rebel Klaudyo : 17 August 2005 - 10:41 AM

Not bad, not bad at all. You could try and put in a few expressions of how pretty you think Larna is, or why she's so attractive to the captain. Romance is rarely a hurried thing, despite what George Lucas tried to do.

Good battle coordination. I liked that. It gets old when the main character does everything himself.

(been on vacation. back now.)

Cheers,
Guapo

Eheheh. Thanks