EV/EVO Chronicles: Try this out. Is it OK?

The mysterious ripple moved along with precision. The mass shadow of the object nearly shattered the gravatic continuum in the system. The strange figure homed in on the small moon of Vuna and the rest was unknown history. The chartreuse particle beam thrust forth and proceeded to vaporize Vuna, the second moon orbiting Sirabr Prime. The whole process took about 45 seconds and there was no debris afterward. There wasn't even a thrust trail leading from the system...


Tweeryar, one of many severely melodramatic high-ranking Zidagar officers, examined the flow chart with frigidness. He assumed the Igadzra or Azdgari had developed some new kind of cloaking device. The mass shadow on the chart proved an object of great size had been there, but the surveillance satellites in the system only recorded Miranu trading vessels; nothing of this proportion. The mass shadow was oblong, a fairly common shape. As for the size...

"An investigation we now need,
For our enemies,
Hath commit evil deeds,
To the docking bay, we shall proceed!"

Poetry. It just had to be poetry. Well, back to the story. The Surveillance Fleet of Zidaras were on their merry way to investigate. Little did they know they would never return...

SZZZAPP! They entered the system.


EVula's Note: People, we (the moderators) can't edit subjects of topics. The subject is the name of the story.

(This message has been edited by moderator (edited 01-16-2002).)

it's very short and a little akward, the ending wasn't that elaborate too, no offense meant. Keep on writing! 🙂

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